The Calves Bad Day

The Calves Bad Day

“Today is a great day to go for a stroll in the African Savanna in October don't you think baby calf?” I said “Yeah” and we went to the river but I could see something and didn't know what it was.

I was walking along the river bank until Dad stopped and and yelled “Run back” because he saw a pride of lions. I ran as fast as I could.

I could hear them getting closer and closer. I lost my balance and I fell in the yucky water. The lions were pulling me out of the water. Until a crocodile came and pulled me too. So it was tug of war.

The lions won. I was still alive, I was just cut and scratched. My dad got some more buffalo reinforcements. Then the lions ran away.

I was rescued by my mum, dad, sister and brother. After I was rescued,I went behind Mum in the herd. while Dad chased the lions away.

I was so relieved that my Dad came back and rescued me from the jaws of the lions. I learnt my lesson to stay in the middle of the herd.

   

By Hayden

The cafls bad day (First draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

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I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened?
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First draft

The cafls bad day

Today is a great day to go for a stroll in the African savanna  in October don't you think baby calf. I said yeah and we went to the river but I could see something and didn't know what it was

I was walking along the river bank. Until dad stopped and and yelled run back. Because he sore and pride  of lions. I ran as fast as I could. i can hear  them getting closer and closer i lost my balance and i fall in the yukky water. The lions were pulling me out of the water. Until a crocodile came and pulled me to so it was tug of war. The lions got me i was still alive i was just cut and scratches.  My dad got some more buffaloes. Then the lions ran And i was out of the water. I was rescued by my mum,dad,sister and brother. After i got out of the water i went behind mum. Wiel dad chased the lions away.

I was so relieved that my dad came back and rescued me from the jaws of the lions. I learnt my lesson to stay in the middle of the herd.