The Calves Bad Day
“Today is a great day to go for a stroll in the African Savanna in October don't you think baby calf?” I said “Yeah” and we went to the river but I could see something and didn't know what it was.
I was walking along the river bank until Dad stopped and and yelled “Run back” because he saw a pride of lions. I ran as fast as I could.
I could hear them getting closer and closer. I lost my balance and I fell in the yucky water. The lions were pulling me out of the water. Until a crocodile came and pulled me too. So it was tug of war.
The lions won. I was still alive, I was just cut and scratched. My dad got some more buffalo reinforcements. Then the lions ran away.
I was rescued by my mum, dad, sister and brother. After I was rescued,I went behind Mum in the herd. while Dad chased the lions away.
I was so relieved that my Dad came back and rescued me from the jaws of the lions. I learnt my lesson to stay in the middle of the herd.
By Hayden
Nice job Hayden I like that you have you Dad in the story and how he save you from the lions.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your recount through the eyes of an animal Hayden. I liked how you used some of your sense to describe what was happening. I was also impressed with some of the language that you used like, 'buffalo reinforcements' and 'rescued me from the jaws of the lions.' THis makes yor writing more interesting to read and helps paint a picture in the audiences mind.
ReplyDeleteI would like to see more detail in this recount, especially during the action. I look forward to reading more of your writing. Thanks for sharing this.